but not the grazing-in-the-pasture kind
they were the cold, unfeeling kind
petrified by poles run through
whirling 'round in forever circles
the carousel horse, of course of course
it was a probable parallel to love
and how it tends to run laps around me
i have tickets again for such a carnival
if i were pretty the mirrors would not shout so loud; i
only come in fun-sized and my mind's made up
i scream only because i am falling
i don't always want to fall
if the cart has reached the top
i beg you
break the whole thing down
so i get stuck somewhere with a view
you can cherry-pick me out later
when everyone's trickled on home
my prize is that i'm learning
i'm not such a good girl anymore
running toward the exit
monsters, clowns, fools
running toward the exit
oh, what a show
the horses in their freeze-frame waltz
are laughing
[this piece is a response to the "carnival" prompt over at Poets United for Think Tank Thursday this week. x]
07.2012
6 comments:
Oh I do have a soft spot for carousels - even if not - what you have done here is truly genius - from first to that last killer line "the horses in their freeze-frame waltz are laughing" WOW!
If you can bring yourself to do so - I'll pass along advice given to me on this site - please turn off your word verification - I think you will find more response - Just a thought
Wow, this was a great read. Love your response to the prompt.Unusual, interesting and so well done.
Enjoyed how you gave voice to the horses, mirrors place. Very visual and clever!
I love your unique view and how you took us on a different journey! The dark was stunning!
I loved the vivid images and the ending...wow :D
wow...thank you, Pearl, Sherry, Sara and Ella and welcome to those i haven't seen here before. i so appreciate your lovely comments. :)
PS - i shall try turning off the word verification. i tend to forget it's on and i rather hate those things myself.
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