Friday, July 20, 2012

once i wrote about horses

once i wrote about horses
but not the grazing-in-the-pasture kind
they were the cold, unfeeling kind
petrified by poles run through
whirling 'round in forever circles
the carousel horse, of course of course

it was a probable parallel to love
and how it tends to run laps around me
i have tickets again for such a carnival

if i were pretty the mirrors would not shout so loud; i
only come in fun-sized and my mind's made up
i scream only because i am falling
i don't always want to fall
if the cart has reached the top
i beg you
break the whole thing down
so i get stuck somewhere with a view
you can cherry-pick me out later
when everyone's trickled on home

my prize is that i'm learning
i'm not such a good girl anymore
running toward the exit
monsters, clowns, fools
running toward the exit
oh, what a show

the horses in their freeze-frame waltz
are laughing

[this piece is a response to the "carnival" prompt over at Poets United for Think Tank Thursday this week. x]

07.2012

6 comments:

Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik (PKP) said...

Oh I do have a soft spot for carousels - even if not - what you have done here is truly genius - from first to that last killer line "the horses in their freeze-frame waltz are laughing" WOW!

Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik (PKP) said...

If you can bring yourself to do so - I'll pass along advice given to me on this site - please turn off your word verification - I think you will find more response - Just a thought

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wow, this was a great read. Love your response to the prompt.Unusual, interesting and so well done.

SaraV said...

Enjoyed how you gave voice to the horses, mirrors place. Very visual and clever!

Ella said...

I love your unique view and how you took us on a different journey! The dark was stunning!
I loved the vivid images and the ending...wow :D

Dana Leah said...

wow...thank you, Pearl, Sherry, Sara and Ella and welcome to those i haven't seen here before. i so appreciate your lovely comments. :)

PS - i shall try turning off the word verification. i tend to forget it's on and i rather hate those things myself.